Thursday, 2 November 2017
100 Word Challenge Week #8
My name is Quetzal and I love eating olives. I celebrated my olives birthday October 20th . I had to tell a white lie to my pickles because they would be jealous and mad at me. My olives are so nice the would jump in a flame if there were one. I took my pickles swimming in there brown juice so they would not be upset. Tomorrow will be such a exciting day because my mother Camecaca will be helping me eat my pickles enemys. My pickles enemys are brocclie sugar and noodles so got to go eat them or my friends will be upset bye.
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Hello Myamaze,
ReplyDeleteThe prompt words are well spread out in your writing. Avoid repeating words in a short piece of writing like this e.g. 'olives' X3, 'pickles' X4, etc. You would benefit from word processing your story in a 'Word' document first, then copying and pasting it into your blog. 'Word' will help you realize where you have made spelling and punctuation errors. Congratulations on completing the 100 Word Challenge Week #8.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van